всем привет!
я поступаю в ээтом году на программу administration and information technologies. в прошлом году я поступала на архитектуру, но решила что это не моё и не поехала учиться. главным элементом для поступления считается хорошая мотивация, и в прошлом году моё мотивационное письмо даже похвалили, поэтому, мне надо написать не хуже этого, а точнее, как то переделать его. кто может помочь с этим?
я должна ответить вот на эти вопросы в мотивации :
What do I expect to gain from studying abroad?
Why do I think it would be useful for me?
Why have I chosen to apply to this course(s)?
Why my background makes me a suitable candidate?
What do I expect to learn?
How will the course(s) help me to achieve my goals?
а вот моя старая мотивация :
Dear Sir or Madam,
I’m Reda and I come from Lithuania. I am graduating from the gymnasium this year. I have heard a lot about Denmark, its culture and traditions. Some of my friends, who study there, have told me many interesting things about this country.
Having visited the university fair in Vilnius, I decided that Denmark is the best option for me. Since I love geography and traveling, I would like to be in touch with Dutch culture, it’s architecture, and interesting people, and find myself there.
I have always been interested in architecture, and history of arts. That’s why I have chosen Denmark as a place where I can study it. And therefore, this is the best place for me to find myself in this sphere. I would like to point out, that I would be glad to study Architectural technology in the following colleges/institutes:
1. Aarhus Technical College
2. Institute of Applied Management
3. VIA University College
The conditions of those universities are the most favorable for me.
What concerns my traits, I suppose that I am very well prepared for architecture and building technology. To my mind, an architectural background is an excellent way to a good career. I also like drawing, coming up with new ideas, designing, planning, managing and implementing processes and tasks in the building and construction sector. Moreover, I’m intrigued by construction design, planning cost control or management of the entire building and construction process, which I find very fascinating. So it is quite easy for me to talk about my career ambitions (becoming an architect) and what I want to do (be employed in the field of architecture).
I would like to mention my achievements in maths and drawing while I was at school. I am really good at problem-solving and figuring things out. I am engaged in plotting and drawing at school and also at the art school. And once, my figure has been noted at an exhibition in Macedonia. I am a good PC user (Excel, MS-Office). Also I have been learning AutoCAD and ArchiCAD lately.
I think, my decision to study this particular course, was affected by my father who worked both as a construction superintendent, and an engineer. He drew and designed a lot, communicated with people, and was responsible for many projects. I have always watched and listened carefully to how he did his job, and have learnt a lot from him. I think I got my drawing skills, my responsibility, and the ability to come up with fast and right decisions, from my father.
I played a lot of sports as a kid. This is where I have learned the values of teamwork, how to win, how to work hard, how to focus and concentrate, and how to find a balance between my time and priorities. And I suppose that the gained experience will be quite valuable for my future life and career.
To sum it up, I think Denmark can provide a lot of opportunities for my future career. It’s the best place to study, live, work and create. Studying at one of these colleges would be a great experience for me. I am sure I will do my best there.
Thank you for considering my application
Yours faithfully,
Reda.
пожалуйста, помогите, как можно её переделать на administration and information technologies program???
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